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skhsohgohdfr
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my poem collection

Postby skhsohgohdfr » Mon Nov 19, 2007 8:21 pm

i hate ducks.
from distance they're fairly ok i guess.
you can walk among them in a sense, and be fairly comfortable at that.
but once they're closing in on you, well then they arnt such a nice species anymore.
if truth to be told, they annoy the living shit out of me.
just look at them, they look ridiculous for chrissake!

this is the first poem i ever constructed. be brutally honest with me. i really need constructive criticism. pls

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Postby skhsohgohdfr » Mon Nov 19, 2007 8:36 pm

move a limb, be suprised.
move two limbs, and you're making f****** progress all right.
dont think about it too much though.
you might want to think about just a little bit, you dont want to be a moron after all.
just dont overthink it, that's all i'm saying.
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Postby skhsohgohdfr » Mon Nov 19, 2007 8:38 pm

my poetry kind of sucks.
i'm sure, it cant even be called poetry.
but what the hell, who gives a shit anyway.
i'm doing my best.

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Postby skhsohgohdfr » Mon Nov 19, 2007 8:44 pm

god damn, what would i do for some wit and intuitive thinking.
i'd do alot, i can tell you that much.
but my neurons arnt closely connected and that side of my brain is at rest.
so what can i do?
well i can pace back and fourth.
and continue writing shit.
who knows, maybe i'll finally write something swell.
yeah sure you will.

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Postby Warmsoul/Jeanie13 » Fri Nov 30, 2007 2:12 pm

(((((((((((((skh)))))))))))) thank you for sharing your thoughts. You are braver than I. Hope you continue doing this.

Thank you again

Warmie 8)


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