when to stop saying I love you

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creaker
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when to stop saying I love you

Postby creaker » Tue Aug 05, 2014 11:19 pm

when i move to kiss your cheek, you pull away
when i touch your shoulder, you shrug off my hand
when i say goodnight, you don't respond
when i arrive or leave, you don't meet my eyes
when i say i love you, where do the words go?

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JonsDragonEyes
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Postby JonsDragonEyes » Wed Aug 06, 2014 6:56 am

I like the way you write. I hope you keep doing so. :lol:

creaker
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Postby creaker » Fri Aug 08, 2014 1:51 am

Thank you!

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Postby 4EverMe » Wed Sep 10, 2014 6:24 am

Hi creaker,
I read this poem a while back and I liked it.
Forgot to tell you so...

It's a small but effective expression- a lot said, but with very few words.
When life throws UA lemon, throw the dang thing back.

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Re: when to stop saying I love you

Postby I am Larry » Thu Sep 11, 2014 2:26 pm

creaker wrote:when i move to kiss your cheek, you pull away
when i touch your shoulder, you shrug off my hand
when i say goodnight, you don't respond
when i arrive or leave, you don't meet my eyes
when i say i love you, where do the words go?


Yes. This is unlove. I have felt it before. It hurts but we see it coming.
"Not necessarily stoned, but beautiful." --Jimi Hendrix


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