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creaker
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morning

Postby creaker » Sun Aug 03, 2014 9:29 am

when the morning sun arises
shafts of golden pain piercing my eyes
forcing my shadows into a new day
scorching my tears into ash

an empty world fades into being
a barren wasteland without you
the soulless existence of nothing
but wait, that sound

soft steps approach near
grey trees become green
small flowers glisten
nature's gifts sparkle - you are here

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JonsDragonEyes
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Postby JonsDragonEyes » Tue Aug 05, 2014 8:12 am

Hey Creaker. It's nice to meet you.

That is an awesome poem. Great job !!

creaker
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thanks

Postby creaker » Tue Aug 05, 2014 8:50 am

Thank you JonsDragonEyes for your nice words, its nice to meet you too.

This poem came to me last Thursday when I woke up, thinking of a friend.

4EverMe
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Location: Washington State

Postby 4EverMe » Wed Sep 10, 2014 6:36 am

Very beautiful, creaker,
Thank you for a moment of calm enjoyment.
Sometimes, it's the "little" things in life that mean
the most to us...
Laughter, music, art, a good book...
and love's essence spoken to us
through the fluid words of a poem.
When life throws UA lemon, throw the dang thing back.

I am Larry
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Location: Vancouver, WA

Re: morning

Postby I am Larry » Thu Sep 11, 2014 2:24 pm

creaker wrote:when the morning sun arises
shafts of golden pain piercing my eyes
forcing my shadows into a new day
scorching my tears into ash

an empty world fades into being
a barren wasteland without you
the soulless existence of nothing
but wait, that sound

soft steps approach near
grey trees become green
small flowers glisten
nature's gifts sparkle - you are here


I love this. The last stanza was a surprise, wonderful warm surprise. Thank you for sharing.
"Not necessarily stoned, but beautiful." --Jimi Hendrix


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